In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Undoubtedly, fast

meals

have a negative impact on

the

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apply

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individuals'

health

and can cause many serious diseases, and, sadly,

this

is the case nowadays in many countries around the globe. Because of

this

and in order to alleviate

this

emerging dilemma , some people suggested

to increase

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increasing

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the taxes on

this

kind of

food

However

, to

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,me

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I totally do not agree with

this

procedure and I

beleive

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believe

there are other

reasnoble

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reasonable

ways to deal with

this

problem. On one hand ,

although

fast

food

has some harmful effects and might result in

wieght

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weight

gain and heart diseases, I do not think that

intensifing

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intensifying

intensified

the taxes and rising the

prrices

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prices

price

of some

food

brands will lead to decreasing its popularity, but it will increase the financial burden on the layperson who

rely

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mainly on

ready made

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meals

in their daily and

hastly

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hastily

fastly

going lifestyle.

Moreover

such

surge

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a surge

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in the prices of fast

food

without a nutritious and healthy substitute might result in another group of

health

issues

such

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and vitamin deficiencies.

On the other hand

, governments can encourage

healthy

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a healthy

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lifestyle

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life style

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lifestyle

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and healthy eating by initiating awareness

campaingns

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campaigns

via social media and television, and at schools and

worplace

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workplace

workplaces

through flyers and seminars. In my

hometwon

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hometown

, shopping malls awareness

campaings

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campaigns

and

health

professionals personnels' visits to schools had remarkably

decrease

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decreased

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the consumption of junk

food

Furthermore

, schools that offer lunch

meals

had to

carfully

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carefully

choose their

food

menu in order to supply

a balanced and nutritious

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balanced and nutritious meals

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meals

to the students ,and

also

some brief seminars introduced by

teachres

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teachers

can play a

cruicial

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crucial

role in

this

issue. In conclusion,

although

food

quality is a major player in shaping people's

health

quality , I absolutely do not agree with increasing the tax on fast

food

in order to control its consumption, while there are many other unharmful ways to alleviate

this

negative trend.

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