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The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given illustration indicates the direction and construction placements of a
school
. The left side is
school's
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the school's
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 map
in
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from
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 1985 and the right side is the current directory. Because of the increase in
school
 population from 1500 to 2300 students, the number of classrooms and facilities
such
 as pool, fitness, and computer room has risen up. Noticeably, there is a warrant
space
 in the middle of the
school
where in
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wherein
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 1085, most spaces are occupied. In 1985, there are two car
park
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parks
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 where the big one is in
rectangle
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rectangular
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 shape between
entrance
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the entrance
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 and
exit
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the exit
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.
However
, the car park is now in the half circle shape at the same
space
, and there's only one
carpark
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car park
 in the
school
.
Moreover
,
school's
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the school's
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 library changed
it's
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its
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 name to
learning
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a learning
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 resources centre with the addition of
computer
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a computer
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 room in the centre. Another significant change between these two years is the reduction of playing fields. In the present, the playing field was cut down its
space
 more than
a
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apply
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half. The majority of the playing field is now on the right side of the
school
 only; that
space
 was substituted by the construction of the pool, fitness centre, and
the
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apply
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additional classroom.
In contrast
, there are few buildings that
similarly
 stay the same: the office and classroom
block
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blocks
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. Regarding the office, both years are very similar in size and location.
Finally
, the classroom block is at the same location with the increase in storeys from 2 in 1985 to 3 until now.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, space with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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