Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students’ attitudes are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some people believe that
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academic
success
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on the competency of
teachers
, others argue that it is
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to the
attitude
of
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students
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. In my view, the
teachers
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teacher's
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ability is critical for
students
' educational
success
,
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there is
also
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attitude
is
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on the
sucess
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success
. On the one hand, the people who
believes
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the
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good
teachers
will
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for the
students
'
success
argue that the teaching methods and
committment
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commitment
of the
teachers
are
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to
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the learning
capasity
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capacity
of the pupil.
For instance
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the
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of Oxford indicated that
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student
grades
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on the
teachers
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teacher's
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influence
of
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the
students
. The
students
consider
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the teacher
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as
thier
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their
role model and the
teacher
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teacher's
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behaviour will
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influences
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the
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students
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performace
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performance
.
On the other hand
, the
students
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student's
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attitude
is important for
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educational
success
. It often
obseved
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observed
that the
student
will not have
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mark in every subject which
is depend
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depends
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on the
students
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student's
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interest and
attitude
.
For example
, the
students
will
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who will
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have higher marks in languages
are
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may have low score in mathematics which shows that the
student
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attitude
for
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toward
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the subject may vary which determine
thier
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their
educational score. In conclusion, the
teachers
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teacher's
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abitlity
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ability
and competency
is depend
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depend
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on the
students
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student's
students'
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performance
however
the
students
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student's
students'
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attitude
is vital for
thier
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their
education
success
.
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Task Response: You should ensure that both views are discussed equally and your personal opinion should be clear and well-supported. You have not fully developed your arguments or provided enough specific examples to support your opinion.
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