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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the quantity of
milk
 produced in each year in four different countries in three different
years
 with the
ten
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ten-year
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years
 interval, starting from 1990. The table shows in litres.
Overall
, it can be seen from the table that
ranking
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the ranking
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 of countries that have
ability
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the ability
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 to produce
milk
 per year was still the same in three different
years
.
Netherlands
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The Netherlands
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 produced
most
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the most
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milk
 in all three
years
. Considering
Netherlands
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The Netherlands
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 and Australia,
they
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apply
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could produce
milk
 for the vast majority of all.
However
, Australia seemed to reduce their production as well. For Australia, the amount of
milk
was moderately drop
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moderately dropped
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 from around 11.2
million
 to 9.1
million
 in 20
years
.
Instead
,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 minimally dropped their product quantity in 2000, from around 11.2 to 11.1
million
,
then
 it rose to just above 11.4
million
 in 2010.
On the contrary
, Tanzania and Guatemala had much lower
milk producing
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milk-producing
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 ability when
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 two countries, but they seemed to increase their product as well. In 1990, Tanzania and Guatemala can
product
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produce
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 87000 and 26000 litres respectively.
However
, it
gradualy
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gradually
 increased
tp
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to
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 155,000 and 84000 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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