The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992
The given pie charts below represent some work patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
Overall
, men prefer non-manual jobs, while
women tend to choose manual occupation
.
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occupations
To begin
with, managerial and professional jobs are more popular among males
, 36% of men selected this
in comparison with twenty nine
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twenty-nine
percentage
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per cent
within
females.There is a significant difference in choice of clerical or related positions, where Change preposition
of
thirty one
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thirty-one
percentage
of females were likely to work in Replace the word
per cent
this
direction, while
only 6% of males
were ready to be employed in this
field.Moreover
, crafts were the third most common choice of males
with 24%, whereas
women’s choices were only three percentage
.
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per cent
However
, there is
a few similarities between Change the verb form
are
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the employments
employments
of both genders. Fix the agreement mistake
employment
It is clear that
gender representatives equally share interests in other manual jobs with 27 and 26 % among females and males
, respectively. Also
, other non-manual works have quite identical rates with only six and nine percentages
within women and men, respectively. Replace the word
per cent
Moreover
, general labourers were the least popular preferred employment types among both genders.Submitted by dnm.best on
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