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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the
plan’s
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plan
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 conditions of Central
Library
right
 now and 20 years ago.
Overall
, there are many differences
places
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in places
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 of
library
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libraries
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 between 20 years ago and now,
such
 as
book
 placement, lecturer
room
, cafe, information desk and reading
room
. In the past, there
were
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was
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enquiry
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an enquiry
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 desk
in
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on
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right
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the right
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 side and
reading
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a reading
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room
in
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on
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 the left side
in
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at
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gate
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the gate
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 entrance of
library
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the library
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. Afterwards, there were
place
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places
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 of
book
 differentiated based on fiction and non-fiction in the middle of the
library
room
 with
table
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tables
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 and chairs between both of them. There are two rooms in the corner,
such
 as children’s
book
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books
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 and computer games. After 20 years, there are a
lot
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lot of
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 changes
from
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in
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 the Central
Library
 rooms. the enquiry desk was removed to become a cafe shop now. Afterwards, the computer
room
replaced
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was replaced
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 by
children’s
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the children’s
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book
 and
move
Wrong verb form
moved
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 to in front of the
room
 which was previously the reading
room
.
Moreover
, the chairs and table
was
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were
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 replaced and
built
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apply
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the self-service machine
in
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on
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 the
right
 side close to
adult
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the adult
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 fiction
book’s
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book
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 place.
In addition
, there is
lecture
Correct article usage
a lecture
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room
right
 now.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, right, book, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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