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write a referral letter to a psycologist

#psycologist
I am writing to refer Mrs Walter, 40 years
old
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40-year-old
 female, who has started to have suicidal thoughts, she requires urgent assessment and management. Today Mrs Walter came to my clinic with
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a complain
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complain
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 of significant fatigue and loss of energy, so she could not cope
her
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with her
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 responsibility
about
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for
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 her housework and taking care of her children. She is complaining of low appetite leading to significant weight loss during the
last
 two months. The most important thing that I should mention is that she has
a
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apply
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wanting to die thoughts. She met me 2 months back
on
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at
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 the end of August as a regular
follow up
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. She was doing well. She had succeeded
to
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in
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 reducing her weight by regular and daily training at the gym.
Also
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 she had a good control asthma attack. Blood tests review that were done on November 2023, were within normal
limit
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limits
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. I would really appreciate it if you
visit
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 Mrs Walter urgently regarding
to
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sever
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severe
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 depression and suicidal thinking. Yours sincerely, Doctor
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General
Ensure to proofread the letter for minor spelling or grammatical errors to enhance clarity and professional tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
Using headings or bullet points for clarity may help organize information more systematically in medical referral letters.
Task Achievement
Consider including more specific details or examples to highlight the urgency of Mrs. Walter's situation more vividly.
Greeting and Closing
Utilizing a formal salutation and closing can convey respect and professionalism in your correspondence.
Task Achievement
Your letter effectively communicates the urgency of Mrs. Walter's situation and conveys a clear request for immediate care.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of your letter flows logically, allowing the reader to understand the progression of Mrs. Walter's condition and the need for referral.
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