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The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of people owning and renting housing in Wales and the United Kingdom between 1918 and 2011. The general overview here is that, over the period, there was a significant decrease in 1939, in the
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cent
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,
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, in the
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owners
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, there were significant increases in 1939.
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 the data, In 1918, the
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cent
 of owners increased significantly to reach the peak at 78 per
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 of households ,
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, the similar years, the proportion of renters was 22 per
cent
. it was clear that, In 1971, the proportion of
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 and rentals
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the percentages
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.
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Furthermore
, In 2001 the proportion is essential to
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the owner
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 that, the per
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 to the peak
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 70 per
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 the
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 years, the
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 of rentals was 30 per
cent
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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