The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph shows the statistics of closed
shops
and new shops
in a certain country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, the number of new shops
reached the highest point in 2011 at 8,500 shops
, meanwhile, the figure of closed shops
was at the bottom position in 2015 at 500 shops
.
To begin
with, the number of new shops
fluctuated during the given period. In addition
, it significantly dropped from 8,500 shops
in 2011 to 4,000 shops
in 2012, and then
it rose to 6,000 shops
in 2014. After that, it decreased to 4,000 shops
in 2015 and remained stable until 2017. Finally
, it slightly declined to 3,000 shops
in 2018. Moreover
, the figure for closed shops
dramatically went down from 6,500 shops
in 2014 to 500 shops
in 2015. However
, it rapidly got back to the normal level of 5,000 shops
in 2016. Later, it remained constant until 2018.Submitted by Punpun on
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