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Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a chilcd's development as other subjects, so it should be a compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that
art
 is necessary in high schools as it plays a vital role in the development of children and its importance
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 to other subjects. From my perspective, I completely agree with the statement and
this
 essay cites and provides evidence. It is apparent that
art
 is involved in many
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such
 as originality, creativity and critical thinking.
To begin
 with, it can help children to develop these skills as they have to feel the emotion and realize the problem needed to put in.
Students
 have to spend time
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looking at the
detail
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 and
then
 think about the reason why the artists used that style, potentially leading to enhancing the imagination and diversity in mind.
Furthermore
, it aids
students
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 off their talent to others, which is a fundamental factor that
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 to an increase in confidence.
As a result
, they can improve their ability to think and solve a variety of problems in life. Another advantage of
art
 classes is that
it
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provides
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student
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 with an outlet for expression and a sense of accomplishment.
Students
 can express their feeling in the
art
 by using different
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 since they can combine to illustrate the meaning of the
art
.
Besides
 that, the advent of
art
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students
 to accomplish their target which is to comprehend the meaning of the
art
, resulting in aspiring to
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 the achievement.
Moreover
,
students
 can explore new cultures,
tradition
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 and
perspective
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.
Consequently
, it helps broaden their horizons and foster a sense of global citizenship. In conclusion, I totally agree that
art
 plays a significant role in developing practical
skill
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 and global friendship to express their feeling together.
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs and ensure transition sentences are used effectively.
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Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and refine language for clarity and precision.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and a solid conclusion, encapsulating the main argument effectively.
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The essay provides a clear and complete response to the prompt, articulating reasons why art is important.
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The main points discussed are relevant and tied back to the overall argument of the essay.
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