The bar chart illustrates the percentage of a car factory's total sale in four continents ( Asia, Europe, South America, Europe and Asia) annually during the five-year period from 2006 to 2010.
A close look at the chart reveals the
sale
of the factory
in Asia presented a
upward Change the article
an
increasing
with slight fluctuation during the Replace the word
increase
period
. The percentage of its sale
was 30% in 2006 sharing the same amount with the sales in Europe and South American
. Correct your spelling
America
Then
the sale
increased dramatically increased at the end
of the period
with 50% in 2010, the largest sale
among the continents.
The sale
in the
Europe Correct article usage
apply
firstly
presented Change the word
first
a
increasing trend with 30% in 2006 and Change the article
an
then
reached about 40% in 2008, the largest sale
of the year. After 2008, the sale
declined again, reaching 30% again. The sale
in North America presented an opposite trend as that of Europe. In
both Change the preposition
At
end
of the Change to a plural noun
ends
period
, the sales was
similar about 30%, the highest Change the verb form
were
sale
in North America and decreased in the middle of the period
, only 5% in 2008. The factory
did not do well in South America with its sale
gradually decreasing from 30% in 2006 to 10% in 2008.
Overall
, the cars produced by this
factory
were always popular in Asia and Europa; This
factory
has become less popular in South American
.Correct your spelling
America
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sale, factory, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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