The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows the percentages of
boys
and
girls
who were successful in their high school competency exams in the period from 2010 to 2011, by subject.
Overall
, students of both sexes performed best in Computer Science, Mathematics, and Foreign Languages, including French, German and Spanish. Results for
boys
and
girls
were roughly equivalent the same in Computer Science and Mathematics. In other subjects,
however
, there were some significant differences.
Girls
achieved by far their best results in Computer Science, with a pass rate of 56.3%, which was considerably around 14% higher than the
boys
. The difference was even more marked in Chemistry, where over 16% more
girls
passed. The single subject where
boys
’ results were better than
girls
was Geography where they achieved a pass rate of 30.4%, which was 10% higher than
that
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the percentage
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girls
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girls
performed better in most subjects in the competency exams than
boys
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competency exams
  • High school
  • Pass rate
  • Disparity
  • Performance gap
  • Subject-specific analysis
  • Year-to-year progression
  • Regression
  • Overall trends
  • Significant
  • Notably wide/narrow
  • Conclusion
  • Observations
  • Consistencies
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