Write a letter to a colleague who is hospitalized at the moment. In your letter you should • ask about his/her health • let him/her know what changes occurred since he/she has been hospitalized • also try to make him/her happy in some ways
Dear Diyora,
The reason why I am writing
you
is Change preposition
to you
asking
about your health and I want to know what has been wrong with you since you came into the room.
How are you? I am Madina and we have been working together in Change the verb form
to ask
this
job for several years. Therefore
, I will ask about your health. Moreover
, we are very
close Add an article
a very
friend
because Fix the agreement mistake
friends
of
I am Change preposition
apply
boring
when you don't come to Replace the word
bored
the
Correct article usage
apply
work
. I will so
happy when you Add a missing verb
be so
came
to our Wrong verb form
come
work
.
A lot of changes occurred at work
since you have been hospitalized. I am mentioning any team updates or developments in office projects. For example
, new
cafeteria is building in our office. In Correct article usage
a new
additional
, our boss will increase Replace the word
addition
to
my position. Change preposition
apply
This
is surprising new
, isn't it?
You must not descend to decline because Correct your spelling
news
of
you have been hospitalized. Change preposition
apply
Although
,
you're not coming to Remove the comma
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
work
, you're being paid daily wages. That's why sometimes they joke that the boss Diyora is taking a break and gets an extra salary. You don't have to worry about your projects are
passed. Wrong verb form
being
For instance
,I will help to these all. I wish you luck in your future endeavors
and hope to return your Change the spelling
endeavours
work
, of course.
Your's sincerely
,
MadinaReplace the adverb
sincere
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