The graph below gives information about the number of Jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

The graph below gives  information about the number of Jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US  between 1960 and 2020.
The bar chart gives information on three economic
activities
in percentage, Agriculture, Manufacturing and Services compared in different areas in the world. In general, Manufacturing accounts for the largest proportion in most of the areas except in Africa.
Therefore
, if we look at the figure for the whole world, Manufacturing is the major economic activity, at 45%, outnumbering Agriculture and Services which cover identical percentages, to be more precise, 30% and 25% respectively. Looking into the details of each activity. Manufacturing is by far the greatest proportion in Asia, at 70%, followed by the number in Europe, at 50%. Africa conducted the least Manufacturing
activities
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30%,
however
, Agriculture
activities
doubled the number and
this
percentage exceeds that of the other areas. The highest Service percentage appears in North America, at just over 40% followed by Europe,
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America, and Africa decreasing by about 10% each. Asia had the least
activities
in Services
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for less than 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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  • economy
  • trend
  • implication
  • workforce
  • significantly
  • contrast
  • speculate
  • influence
  • reflection
  • demand
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