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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet.

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Numerous individuals have complexity controlling in good health diets.
This
 essay will discuss some of the major issues about dietary problems and illustrates how we can easily overcome
this
 problem by some simple life changes. Nowadays people tend to freeze
food
 that won't be sufficient for good health. It can be seen, numerous reasons can be issued for having
junk
food
such
 as birthdays, gossiping with friends, corporate meetings, and so on. Everyone depended on
junk
food
 day by day. Number of fast
food
 restaurants have rapidly risen over the past 7 years. The restaurants are offering various types of
junk
food
, caloric
food
such
 as sugar, drink, Chinese
food
, and so on. There are several good reasons that can compel one to go in favour of the statement. According to the research statistics, people all over the universe tend to have fast
food
 even when they meet with several problems
such
 as dietary problems. Another reason can be found for dietary problems
such
 as smoking, and so on. These types of habits can be issues that people cannot control healthy lifestyle. Research shows that, people who have dietary the percentage is increasing nowadays.
In addition
 to these, there are differences between rural areas and urban areas. The people who lived in the rural areas suffer from many types of even simple diseases only because of their inability to benefit from these health-related published materials as they lack the ability to read.
However
, the situation is opposite those who lived in the urban areas.
This
 problem can be solved by changing some lifestyle rules.
Firstly
, think about
food
 that has a lot of calories, sugar and fat and it should be avoided.
Secondly
, smoking provides a basis for an unhealthy life so that these types of drugs should be avoided.
Finally
, people should have watched tv series or newspaper because several types of problems and solutions can be found from which. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
junk
food
, even drugs can be the cause of dietary problems.
Therefore
 the government should enhance consciousness about healthy life.
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