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Some people believe that media should be allowed to publish information about the private lives of famous people. Others say that everybody has a right to privacy and this practice must be controlled or even stopped. Discuss both views.

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Nowadays
media
 is so active that they are publishing the private
information
 of the famous without even taken the consent of them. Some
people
 think
this
 should be allowed and others think
this
practice
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 should be stopped as everyone have the right to keep their private life in privacy. In my view
this
 is wrong and
this
 must be controlled or even stopped. As the world is more advance and
people
 are up to date with technology and
media
.
However
, when it comes to
media
,
media
 is one of the most important sources of
information
 from which we can get
information
 about anything like sport, politics, weather forecast, famous
people
 or celebrities, etc. The
media
 is doing a lot of good work and showing the general public the true face of democracy, etc.
However
, for TRP,
Media
 is doing whatever they can do like they are publishing the private
information
 of famous
people
 and celebrities, etc. without even taking consent from them.
This
 gives popularity to the
media
 channel but at the same time,
this
 will put a negative impact on that person.
For example
: In my ,country India, the
media
 do publish the personal info of the celebrities to get the top for there channel. In my ,view
this
 is wrong to expose or to telecast the privacy of any person because everyone has the right to have their known privacy and
media
 don't have any right to telecast it without any consent from them. Therefor some control or restriction should be put on the
media
 or some legal action should be taken on
media
 for doing all
this
.
However
, In conclusion,
Media
 should think before telecasting anything which is personal and the government should take some legal action if anything unnecessary is been publish by the
media
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