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Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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A group of people opine that to be a successful sportsman you need innate abilities,
while
other
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 deem that sheer hard
work
 and endurance can make you prosperous. I believe that through dedication only we can achieve success. I will substantiate my view in the following paragraphs
along with
 an example. Few people reckon that you need
skills
 which are basic instincts of a human being to become a good player. The main reason behind
this
 must be the genes you inherit from your parents which
plays
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 a vital role
to hone
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in honing
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 your
career
.
For example
, the daughter of Muhammed Ali learnt basic boxing
skills
 and talent from her father. She has won many medals at national and international level. No doubt, that having natural abilities can help make a
career
 successful. “Success comes before
work
 only in the dictionary” is a well-said proverb. I believe that to make a successful
career
 in sports we not only need sheer dedication but
also
 hard
work
. By constant
practise
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, we not only increase our stamina but
also
 hone our
skills
 and focus on our weaknesses.
Although
 hard
work
 can be at some times tedious it does yield results. To illustrate, the world-famous
batsmen
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 Virat Kohli
use
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 to practice for 8 hours
in
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a day to reach
a
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 topmost position in cricket history.
Hence
, practice and hard
work
 play a vital role than natural talent. To recapitulate, in-born
skills
 are necessary to make a
a
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successful
career
 in sports, but I believe that through hard
work
 and practice
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,
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we can hone our
skills
 very well
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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