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Two sorts of communities views on the happiest time of a person's life

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Throughout the human
life
 cycle, there appears to be a certain period when a person is the freest and happiest. There has been a debate including
this
 exact timespan, with one part of the world's population assuming it to be the teenage years, and the other piece supposing it to be adult
life
. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and give my opinion as well. To start, some of the communities that believe that
life
 between the ages 13-18 is the most joyful are convinced of
this
 because their theory is that even if some people find
this
 phase troubling, it may be the duration when an individual creates the best memories and the closest companions,
additionally
, no one can relive
this
 in any other chapter of their
life
, for the reason that your energy and all of the activities that aided you in producing
life
-long recollections, will not be there anymore.
Furthermore
, other sorts of these groups that consider adolescence to be the most delightful part of existence likely do so for the reason that they favour comfortability and freedom over anything else.
Although
 an adult carries greater responsibilities, they still prefer the feeling of comfort of living in their own home and being free to carry out any action that comes to their mind. If we keep in mind that a grown-up is bound to be in stress most of the time because of the weight of all the things that they are liable for
such
 as taxes, employment, bill-paying, and house chores
then
 we can value the time we had with almost no duty.
To conclude
,
while
 both of these points of view put many logical arguments to the table, I reckon the youth age would have the trump card in
this
 situation.
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