As computers are being used more and more in education, there will soon be no role for the teachers in classrooms. What extent do you agree or disagree

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Widespread usage of technology-based tools in education institutions has
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many people to argue that machines can displace
teachers
in the future.
However
, I completely disagree because not only their teaching is more adaptive, but they are
also
an excellent source of motivation. One of the biggest
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of
teachers
which make them irreplaceable is that
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their Emotional intelligence, like any other human being, cannot be replicated by a machine.
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, gestures,
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alertness and focus of learners, which facilitates a teacher to change his teaching methodology in accordance with
this
information.
For example
, a teacher might navigate between easy and hard
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in mathematics class , depending on engagement and feedback from the
students
in a classroom.
This
is beyond any machine's capability to comprehend
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as a
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will fail to provide
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quality of education as humans can provide. Another undisputable fact is that
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our
teachers
are excellent mentors.
Hence
,
in addition
to teaching
academics
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subjects, they
also
guide us in making informed career choices and are excellent
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of motivation.
For example
, many educators are an inspiration for
students
to become a tutor.
Also
, their academic achievements and past accomplishments
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often encourage
students
to work with persistence and dedication in order to attain the same success.
Therefore
, an opportunity to meet our favorite trainers on
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basis
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a necessary impetus to stay
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on our goals. In conclusion, there is no replacement for our
teachers
and I will reiterate my opinion that their ingenuity in educating subjects augmented by awareness of
students
' sentiments,
along with
positive influence their positive influence, make them irreplaceable by any technology.
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task response
The introduction lacks a clear indication of the writer's opinion and does not sufficiently address the task question. The conclusion is adequate, but also lacks a clear restatement of the writer's position.
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The logical structure is generally sound, with ideas flowing coherently. However, there is room for improvement in the introduction and conclusion, which should give a clear preview and summary of the main points and restate the position on the topic.
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The essay demonstrates varied and appropriate use of vocabulary, but there are some instances of inaccurate word choices and awkward phrasing. More precise and academic vocabulary could be used to strengthen the lexical resource.
grammatical range
The essay displays a reasonable command of grammatical range, with a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are instances of subject-verb agreement errors and awkward sentence constructions.
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