Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behavior. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, it seems that more people are migrating to other countries than ever before.
This
raise
Suggestion
raises
certain question about the integration of newcomers into
society
.
Although
there are valid arguments to the contrary, in
this
paper I will argue that it is the responsibility of immigrants to adapt to accepted rules of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in their adopted
country
, both written and unwritten. The reasons for
this
are twofold.
Firstly
, it is vitally important that newcomers observe the laws of their adopted
country
for the sake of social order. Imagine the chaos that would
ensure
issue or terminate (in a specified way, state, etc.); end
ensue
if people refused to drive on the same side of the road. It is,
therefore
, necessary for all-immigrants to ensure that they observe the law in their new
country regardless
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country, regardless
of any differences to laws in their home
country
. Two
further
instances of practices which are permitted in some
countries but
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countries, but
prohibited in others are the possession of firearms and gambling.
Secondly and
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Secondly, and
more importantly, though, in order to maintain societal cohesion it is essential that newcomers respect the social norms of their adopted
country
. Of course, having a mixture of different cultures and traditions gives a
country
color
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
colour
and
vibrancy
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vibrant
;
however
, I would contend that too much cultural diversity undermines a
society
by alienating people from each other. It is my belief that similarities unite people, whereas differences have a tendency to divide. A strong
society
is a homogenous
society
with shared values and goals. By way of conclusion, I believe that
this
issue is likely to become even more important in the future as border between countries become increasingly blurred. It,
therefore
, demands out
further
consideration.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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