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some people think that the development of technology help to decrease crime and other people think that would encourage crime to discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Technological development is taking place rapidly these days. Some would have argued developing these reduce the percentage of criminal acts. While on the other group of people put their argument by saying that
instead
 of lowering crime rates these advancements in technology will make the criminal activities higher. I believe these developing tendencies in technology have contributed a lot
for
Suggestion
to
 the decrease of criminal activities.
To begin
 with, a number of cyber crimes are rapidly taking place due to the invention and implementation of technological items. By using the hidden cameras these days, individuals are capturing the private moment of others. The perpetrator, who does so, is found to be blackmailing by threatening to explore the privacy of others which are often shameful to see
such
 as sexual intimacy.
Therefore
, the criminal continuously enforces the innocent person to do in terms of their interest like the victims are being compelled to give money.
That is
 the reason why it has been seen that crimes are taking place with the support of the technologies.
However
, it cannot be denied that instilments of these technologies have created terror among the criminal to involve more in
such
 activities
such
 as CCTV Camera on roads or shops.
On the other hand
, because of the installation of these items, many criminal minds think the outcome a thousand times before attempting to harm others, as the cameras can easily capture the robbery or murder in the places.
For instance
, in Australia, nearly 45 percent, robberies in public places have been reduced, after putting the cameras, and the complaints seem to have less in comparison to that in the past.
Thus
, the technologies have proven their contribution in
reduction
Suggestion
reduce
reduced
 the crime rate due to their smartest features. In conclusion, these inventions have found to be more effective to reduce the crime rates, because of their effectiveness to create a terror among the criminal minds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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