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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
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The table illustrates data and predictions regarding the change in
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and above in
Canada
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,
Germany
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 and the
UK
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.
Overall
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, the United Kingdom had and is predicted to have the lowest
percentage
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and above in all years. As can be seen, in 1988 the percentages of the
population
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 aged 65 and above in
Canada
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 and the
UK
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 were pretty similar with
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rates of 16.32
percent
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 and 14.23
percent
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 respectively.
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, in 1988 the highest proportion of the
population
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 aged 65 and above was in
Germany
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 with
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 rate of 20.45
percent
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. By 2000, the percentages of the
population
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 aged 65 and above in
Canada
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,
Germany
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 and the United Kingdom had risen. In 2000 the
percentages
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percentage
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and above in
Canada
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 was 20,67
percent
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,
whereas
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 in
Germany
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 the rate was 25.32
percent
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 and in the
UK
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 the
percentage
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 was 14.89
percent
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. In 2030 the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and above In
Canada
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 is predicted to be 26.35
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 in
Germany
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 it is predicted to be 30.42
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percent
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per cent
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 which is predicted to have the highest
percentage
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and above and in the
UK
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 the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and above is predicted to be 20.35
precent
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per cent
 which is predicted to have the lowest rate of the
population
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 aged 65 and above.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, canada, germany, uk, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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