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Some people think that scientists experimenting with animals in the laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use to what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #scientists #animals #laboratory #guarantee #products
The
experiment
 with mammals in a
laboratory
did
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 by researchers is the best method for
made
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making
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 a secure invention for people. In my opinion, I agree that
experiment
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experiments
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 should attend in the
laboratory
 because guarantee the security and support for the scientific method. Security is the most
issue
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important issue
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 when scientific research
will realize
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 it. Important for
researcher
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the researcher
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guarantee
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about
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apply
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a secure issue.
As a result
, the
experiment
 has to
held
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be held
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 in a special
place
 because a
laboratory
 will protect us from failure by a trial-and-error
experiment
.
For example
, an invention to identify a new virus. If the researcher makes a mistake the effect
not
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 spread away to the other places. That’s why the
laboratory
 become
safe
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place
 for an
experiment
especially
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, especially
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 for trial and error with animals.
On the other hand
, the research process needs many tools
for
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to
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 support the research method.
Therefore
, an
experiment
 has to
held
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be held
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 in a
laboratory
due to
has
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having
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 special tools.
For instance
, If
the
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apply
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scientist
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scientists
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want
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want to
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 look a blood
sample
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samples
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 of animals for
the
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an
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experiment
,
so
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apply
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they need a microscope. The microscope can’t operate
on
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in
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 the
others
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place
 except in a
laboratory
.
To conclude
, the secure
place
 being a part of preventive action
for
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to
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 protect us from failure
experiment
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experiments
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 and a
laboratory
 has complete tools for support that activity became the best way
for
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to
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 produce a safe product
to
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for
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 us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guarantee
  • safe
  • human use
  • scientists
  • experimenting
  • laboratory
  • animal testing
  • valuable information
  • alternative methods
  • equally effective
  • product safety
  • ethical concerns
  • cruel
  • inhumane
  • technologies
  • advancements
  • research
  • reduce
  • replace
  • regulations
  • guidelines
  • ethical treatment
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