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The chart below gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the data about three
products
 which are exported from
Someland’s
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Someland
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 during 2005,
2015
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and 2015
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 and future predictions for 2025 in
Billion
USD
.
Overall
, International tourism and Dairy
products
 were the highest overseas sold items for both years and
also
 in future.
Whereas
, meat
products
 were exported
in
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at
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minimum
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a minimum
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 and expected the same in future. In 2005, Meat
products
 sold were 4
billion
USD
 and by 2015
this
 has moderately dropped to about 3.5
billion
USD
.
Whereas
, in 2025 it is estimated to reach around 3
billion
USD
.
On the other hand
, the diary
products
, exported in 2005 were almost 5.7
billion
USD
, which has risen rapidly to nearly 8
billion
USD
, but in 2025 it is expected to decrease sharply
around
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to around
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 6.3
billion
USD
.
Finally
,
the
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apply
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International tourism,
which
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apply
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experiences an upward trend with around 6.2
billion
USD
 in 2005,
almost
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and almost
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 7
billion
USD
 in 2015.
However
, in 2025 it is estimated that
the
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apply
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International tourism marketing might reach about 7.8
billion
USD
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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