Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each orther. Others argue that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A group of individuals think that in
this
modern era, many people are completely reliable
on each other. Replace the word
reliant
In
Change preposition
On
contrary
, others think that they have Correct article usage
the contrary
became
more independent and do whatever they like. Change the verb form
become
This
essay will discuss both perspectives with their reasoned points and exapmle
. I opine by stating that the individuals in Correct your spelling
examples
todays
time believe they are free and can do whatever they Change noun form
today's
likes
.
Change the verb form
like
To begin
with,the use of technology has been ushered in todays
generation and because of Change to a genitive case
today's
this
, almost everyone are
dependent on Change the verb form
is
the
new inventions. Some are waiting for the government or the great scientist to launch a new design and to invent those things which can reduce the regular chores of a normal citizen. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, In Africa
majority of the individuals are in Add a comma
Africa,
Add an article
the belief
belief
that the federal government will take some Replace the word
believe
precations
in order to reduce Correct your spelling
precautions
the
poverty. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, they don't try and look after a new job. They just spend their whole life staying in this
thought that the high people will help them in improving their lifestyle.
In
Change preposition
On
Contrary
, Some think that they are more free and can do whatever they like. They usually believe that because of all the human rights which were implemented in the past few decades, give them Correct article usage
the Contrary
their
Change the word
the
rights
to become so open. But Fix the agreement mistake
right
sometime
Replace the word
sometimes
this
can also
bring certain evils. For Instance
, In Pakistan
it is believed that the army and the terrorist are so free that they can even take control of their own government. These terrorists can even blast their own small part of the city without any fear.
I believe that, as Add a comma
Pakistan,
the
time Correct article usage
apply
passess
and the new generation should be taught some manners Correct your spelling
passes
anlet
them know about the rules and Correct your spelling
let
and let
regulation
. So that they Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
dont
do things over the head.
In conclusion, taking any Correct your spelling
don't
of
Change preposition
apply
the
country from the whole world there will be always two Correct article usage
apply
differnt
Correct your spelling
different
type
of groups, Change to a plural noun
types
firstly
the one who are
always dependent and the other who can do whatever they like. So Change the verb form
is
this
can be a never ending
dispute and it will go on for a long time.Add a hyphen
never-ending
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