The scientist believe that computer will become intelligent than human beings. Some people find it is positive while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the
technology driven
world, there may be a chance that Add a hyphen
technology-driven
computer
will become more intelligent as compared to mankind. It is often argued that Fix the agreement mistake
computers
this
is a positive development, while
others disagree and think that these kinds of development may affect negatively to
human life. Change preposition
apply
This
essay agrees that an increase
in computer technology
is beneficial for the world.
On the one hand, advancement
of Correct article usage
the advancement
technology
may help to live
life easier for individuals. If Verb problem
make
computer
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computers
will
become more intelligent, they may be useful in different sectors Verb problem
apply
such
as medical and industrial. While
these kinds of technology
will be developed with predefine programmed
, the computers can be worked more Replace the word
predefined programming
accurate
and continuously regarding their fields. Change the word
accurately
For example
, most of
German automobile companies use Change preposition
apply
some
robots in their production, Correct quantifier usage
apply
therefore
the production is
doubled as compared to Verb problem
has
past
decade. Add an article
the past
Thus
, improvement in technology
may give benefits for
the industries and society.
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to
However
, some people
believe that intelligent computers are problematic for the society. If the machine is working in the industries, companies will not hire humanities for their same
work. Correct word choice
apply
While
people
have
not enough amount of jobs, it will automatically Add a missing verb
do have
increase
the amount of unemployed people
, therefore
which may be a chance to Rephrase
apply
increase
the crime rate. For example
, one survey proved that 30 percent
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per cent
people
will lose their jobs in 2025 Change preposition
of people
due to
robots that
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which
also
increase
the crime rate exponentially.
To conclude
, although
it is fact
that intelligent computers have some negative effect, I personally think it is advantageous, which give several industrial and social advantages to Correct article usage
a fact
the
society.Correct article usage
apply
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