Some people say that adverstising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.Other people thing that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A few individuals believe that
adverstising
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advertising
is very
essentials
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essential
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to make us
buying
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buy
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items. I concede that
ads
are required to buy
products
from the market. Below both
viwes
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views
are illustrated. Advertisement is very much
need
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needed
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to
buys
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buy
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things because people can
aware
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be aware
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of
products
by seeing
ads
. Without any acknowledgement how
we
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are we
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aware of
products
.
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?
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example
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acko insurance
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Acko Insurance
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is very famous in
india
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India
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because we
are seeing
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see
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advertisement
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advertisements
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in
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on
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television.
Also
, we can get good quality
of
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apply
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products
because it
is see
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is seen
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by
global
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the global
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world on television through
ads
. Sellers can not cheat us . They have
fear
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a fear
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of people if they sell bad
products
. Other people think that advertisement is
no
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not
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needed as it is common because we are watching
same
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the same
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ads
in
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apply
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multiple times. Some
products
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product
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ads
are watching
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have been watched
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since our childhood.
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example
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we
are
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have been
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watching
ponds
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the ponds
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cream
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ad
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ads
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from
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for
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long a time in
india
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India
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. In
coclusion
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conclusion
,
ads
are required all the time so that we can buy
products
.
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Task Response
You have touched upon both views but have not provided a balanced discussion. Make sure to present arguments for both sides and provide a clear opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is acceptable, but could be improved. Try to organize your ideas more effectively by using clear topic sentences and supporting each point with relevant examples.
Lexical Resource
Your lexical resource is satisfactory, but there are some errors and awkward phrasing. Try to expand your vocabulary and practice using new words and phrases in context.
Grammatical Range
Your grammatical range is limited and there are several grammatical errors throughout the essay. Make sure to review grammar rules and practice using different sentence structures.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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