It is more important for a building to serve purpose than look beautiful , architectures should not worry about producing building as a work of art. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered some
people
believe that
paper
books
will be replaced in the future
while
other
people
confirm that
paper
books
always be in trend.
This
essay will discuss these two opinions and give examples of them. On the one hand, nowadays
e-
books
are in trend because they can easily be downloaded, they are cheap and comfortable if
people
read electronic
books
, and trees can be saved because the
paper
is taken from trees.
For instance
, when someone downloads and reads
e-
books
, they will have some comfort
such
as
easy
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being easy
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to carry, and using fewer
paper
books
leads
less
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to less
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of
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apply
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cutting trees.
In addition
, using
e-
books
is useful because using them leads
people
not to use
paper
and
people
do not need to buy expensive
paper
books
from shops.
On the other hand
,
paper
books
are more useful than
e-
books
because when a blind person wants to read a book, they will need to read with their hands and if they get
e-
books
, they can not read that book. Some
people
find
paper
books
more interesting and enjoyable and believe that they do not
make
Verb problem
cause
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eye problems.
For example
, when a child wants to read a story, parents can give
books
instead
of the phone because children may play a game rather than read the e-book.
Moreover
,
paper
books
will not disappear because it is more useful than
e-
books
,
it
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they
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is
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are
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enjoyable, interesting, and useful to blind
people
. In conclusion, some
people
say that
e-
books
will be replaced with
paper
books
however
others think that
paper
books
are more important than electronic
books
and will never disappear. For the reasons that have been mentioned above, in my opinion, I believe that
paper
books
are useful and can not be replaced with
e-
books
.
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly reflects the actual essay question, which is about the importance of function versus aesthetics in architecture, not about paper books versus e-books.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your paragraphs effectively, with clear topic sentences and logical progression of ideas. Avoid sudden shifts in topic or argument.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary specific to the topic being discussed in order to accurately express your points.
grammatical range
Write complex sentences accurately, and carefully proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and enhance clarity.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Functionality
  • Utilitarian
  • Practicality
  • Function
  • Purpose
  • Aesthetics
  • Artistic value
  • Design
  • Architectural
  • Harmony
  • Visual appeal
  • Form follows function
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Balance
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