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It is more important for a building to serve purpose than look beautiful , architectures should not worry about producing building as a work of art. Do you agree or disagree?

It is considered some
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 believe that
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 will be replaced in the future
while
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 other
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 confirm that
paper
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books
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 always be in trend.
This
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 essay will discuss these two opinions and give examples of them. On the one hand, nowadays
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 are in trend because they can easily be downloaded, they are cheap and comfortable if
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 read electronic
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, and trees can be saved because the
paper
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 is taken from trees.
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, when someone downloads and reads
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books
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, they will have some comfort
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 as
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 to carry, and using fewer
paper
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books
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 leads
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to less
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cutting trees.
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, using
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books
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 is useful because using them leads
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 not to use
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 and
people
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 do not need to buy expensive
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books
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 from shops.
On the other hand
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,
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books
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 are more useful than
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books
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 because when a blind person wants to read a book, they will need to read with their hands and if they get
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books
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, they can not read that book. Some
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 find
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books
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 more interesting and enjoyable and believe that they do not
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 eye problems.
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, when a child wants to read a story, parents can give
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instead
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 of the phone because children may play a game rather than read the e-book.
Moreover
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,
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books
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 will not disappear because it is more useful than
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books
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,
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 enjoyable, interesting, and useful to blind
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. In conclusion, some
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 say that
e-
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books
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 will be replaced with
paper
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books
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however
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 others think that
paper
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books
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 are more important than electronic
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 and will never disappear. For the reasons that have been mentioned above, in my opinion, I believe that
paper
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books
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 are useful and can not be replaced with
e-
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books
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.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly reflects the actual essay question, which is about the importance of function versus aesthetics in architecture, not about paper books versus e-books.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your paragraphs effectively, with clear topic sentences and logical progression of ideas. Avoid sudden shifts in topic or argument.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary specific to the topic being discussed in order to accurately express your points.
grammatical range
Write complex sentences accurately, and carefully proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and enhance clarity.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Functionality
  • Utilitarian
  • Practicality
  • Function
  • Purpose
  • Aesthetics
  • Artistic value
  • Design
  • Architectural
  • Harmony
  • Visual appeal
  • Form follows function
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Balance
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