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Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
The globalization and astonishing invention of the
internet
has
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have had
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 a great impact on
the
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learning methods.
Although
 nowadays
majority
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 of pupils have used the
internet
 to learn and acquire
a
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 required information,
libraries
 have their own importance in providing resources. I partially agree with the above notion and my reasons for the inclination are articulated in the following paragraphs. To commence with, it is true that, the
Internet
 is a treasure of data and info in all
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fields and It
is
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 having their own advantages.
Firstly
, any data on any subject can be attained in
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 of
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a seconds
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seconds
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at
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round
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around
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 the clock;
while
libraries
are working
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work
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 only for a few hours
in
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a day.
Secondly
, it provides mobility, the material
getting
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gets
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 updated
at
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every second and one can get updated records in a minimal time.
Finally
, they provide comfort
to get
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in getting
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 information without going to
the
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 particular place and it is
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 boon to
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busy people.
For instance
, students can
also
 acquire details of the ongoing research on a specific topic.
On the other hand
, the
libraries
 have their own importance. First of all, in terms of the ambience.
Moreover
, the
libraries
 have a quiet environment with
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 distractions, which helps to study with full
of
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concentration.
For example
, During
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the examination
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examination
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examinations
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, 30% of students
are preferring
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prefer
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 to study in college or school
libraries
.
Furthermore
, anybody can update the blog or material on the
internet
 and
thus
 there are no granted research papers available to find records of the experiments.
To conclude
,
however
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 the
internet
 is a great source of information with accessibility and mobility, the library has its own advantages
such
 as ambience,
quite
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quiet
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 environment and proof of correct data with the name of the author.
Submitted by Nikita & Kash  on

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