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The death penalty is a contentious issue in many states and countries around the world. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the
death
penalty
 is a polemic subject in different countries around the world. I strongly believe that the drawbacks surpass the benefits. The main reason I do not support the
death
penalty
 is because of the practical results on the reduction of criminality. It is well known that there are numerous studies
prooving
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proving
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 that the reduction of
crimes
do
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 not decrease with
death
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a death
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sentence
,
thus
, they are not related.
For instance
, it is possible to find cities where the
death
penalty
 had a positive impact in
United
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 States, but
also
 cities where the violence increased.
Furthermore
, the
death
penalty
 has a direct impact
at
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 the economy of the states. To implement the
death
penalty
 policy is quite expensive, not only because of the taxes
,
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 but
also
 the maintenance of the structure.
For example
, cities would have to pay high taxes
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 the government
instead
 of investing in solutions to solve the crime problem.
However
, it is
also
impportant
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important
 to mention that the
death
sentence
 can reduce critical
crimes
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 society. There is no question that the
death
sentence
 causes some kind of fear in people.
For example
, those who intend to execute
crimes
such
 as killing and rape. In conclusion, I believe that the negative aspects of
death
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penalty
 exceed the positive aspects, not only because
of
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there is no relation between
this
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sentence
 and the reduction of criminality
,
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 but
also
 because of the negative impact
at
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 the local economy.
On the other hand
, it is argued that the
death
penalty
 can cause a fear effect on some individuals, and reduce some specific
crimes
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details that relate to the main argument.
task achievement
Provide a more balanced view by acknowledging counterarguments and addressing them in the essay.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary to include more synonyms and varied expressions.
grammatical range
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure to improve clarity and accuracy.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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