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Some people think that studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life. While others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #today’s #life #history #source #information
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my concern about the incorrect
dates
 of the Ganesh festival
event
 mentioned in your 2021 edition of the magazine. I was shocked to see that under the section of
local
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 travel guide of your magazine the start date mentioned for
Ganesh
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the Ganesh
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 festival
event
 was 11th September
,
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 2021. Let me take a chance to correct you on
this
 information. As per the local
authorities
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 the events starts much earlier
from
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 5th September
,
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 2021. Despite the fact that events
dates
 are available on other online channels, It is of prime importance for you to take
an
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immdeiate
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immediate
 corrective action. Many foreign tourists refer to your online magazine when they are planning their travel.
Also
, I am sure you are aware that
Ganesh
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 festival
event
 is one of the prime tourist
attraction
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. Every year it attracts thousands of international
visistors
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visitors
, who
specifcally
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specifically
 come to experience local culture. I insist you
to
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corect
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correct
 the
dates
 as soon as possible and publish an updated version.
Moreover
, please send out an apology email to all your followers and subscribers.
In addition
 to
this
 please send
a
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notification about
exact
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dates
 of the
event
. Please give
this
 matter your immediate attention. Yours faithfully, Amol Joshi
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