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Some people think high-end technology can prevent and cut down the rate of committing crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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The usage of sophisticated
technology
 in the means to reduce
the
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crime
 rates has raised conflicting opinions. In my perspective, I completely agree that the advent of cutting-edge
technology
 can reduce the
crime
 rate or even prevent
people
 from committing
such
 actions.
First
 and foremost, modern devices have revolutionized the way surveillance can be done.
For instance
, security guards no longer need to go over all the places in a mall to find the potential criminal action, they can just watch it from the screen with a CCTV recording showing
people
’s activities in a specific place at a specific time.
In addition
, it can help authorities to identify the culprit if there is shoplifting going on, quickly and effectively.
Hence
, the efficiency of
this
technology
 will have a big impact in solving
crime
.
Secondly
, with
technology
 like microdrone, a tiny device with an infrared feature and has the ability to fly over 350ft above the ground without
people
 noticing, the police can monitor the crowd in public places
such
 as in a field of Coachella music festival. Violation often happens when there is a chance and that chance is massively increased in a crowded place where
people
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 about their own safety or property. In
this
 situation, a thief can sneak around freely without the fear of getting caught. But, with the implementation of microdrones,
such
 action can be prevented and solved immediately.
As a result
, the
crime
 rates will be reduced and
people
 can feel safer going to a crowded place. Current
technology
 has
also
 made it possible to gather data at a click of a button. With a DNA database, the detection of possible suspects for a felony can be done swiftly and correctly. So, the right felons can be caught, preventing them from being free and doing other potentially harmful actions. In conclusion, the implementation of advanced
technology
 can help reduce and prevent illegal and lawbreaking activities.
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