You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to you in
context
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the context
of your advertisement in brochure related to
tour
organised by you in the mountains. I was very excited and pleased to know about
this
tour
as I love
mountains
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the mountains
and from
childhood I
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childhood, I
always love to be in
pleasent atmostphere
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the pleasant atmosphere
pleasant atmostphere
a pleasant atmosphere
pleasant atmosphere
pleasent atmosphere
of
countryside
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the countryside
. I would like to
regiter
record in writing; enter into a book of names or events or transactions
register
for the
tour but
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tour, but
before that I need few details related to
tour
like, the dates and details about the travel plan,
also
the places we are supposed to visit during the
tour
and mainly the prices. I would
also
like to know about the food if you are providing and details about the hotels or camp side. The other thing bothering me is my health as I am
a
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an
Asthma patient and sometime I need medical help but
that is
very rare chance of the requirement. As
tour
is all about
mountains
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the mountains
I am aware that in heights there will be
shortage
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a shortage
of oxygen and so it will worsen my
brething
the bodily process of inhalation and exhalation; the process of taking in oxygen from inhaled air and releasing carbon dioxide by exhalation
breathing
problem and I will not be able to keep up with everyone in the
tour
. I would like to know that person with
condition
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the condition
a condition
like mine are allowed to join the
tour
, since you are very much experience in
this
field and might face tourist like mine so hope you can
suggets
make a proposal, declare a plan for something
suggest
me
wheather
introduces two alternatives
whether
I can join
this
tour
or not. I will wait for details of the
tour
and answers to my concerns.Thanks in advance. With Regards, Krishna Pujara.

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