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Many people believe that it is good idea to have dress code at work place. do you agree ?

#people #idea #dress #code #work #place
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The issue of uniformity in dressing among
workers
 has become a hot topic of discussion in our society today. A vast majority are of the opinion that having
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formal acceptable attire in the
work
 settings is good. From an individual perspective, I absolutely agree with
this
 belief.
This
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 offices.
Firstly
, having a
dress
code
 at
work
 creates a good customer's impression.
This
 is because appearance shows the manner. Clients are able to detect the seriousness and how
business minded
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 the
workers
 are unlike when they appear casually in their place of
work
.
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,
according to
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research carried out among middle-aged men in Nigeria about what made them stick to their first Bank of choice, it was revealed,
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 of them returned after their initial encounter because of how neatly and smart the
workers
 appeared.
As a result
, clients are able to see the company in a good light.
Secondly
, it creates uniformity among the employees. Following a specific mode of dressing will create a feeling of equality among the
workers
 and will
as well
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increase their sense of belonging which can
make
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in turn boost their
self esteem
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.
For instance
, colleagues at
work
 will not have to worry about their appearance since they are all obeying a particular
code
 of conduct guiding their
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. Thereby eliminating completely the feeling of inferiority that may be associated with how they
dress
. In conclusion, personally, I ultimately believe it is good for
workers
 to have a
dress
code
.
This
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argued
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 that
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code
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work
 is crucial
,
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 because it
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 the customers to form a good opinion about the organization and
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create
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 uniformity among the
workers
.
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Task Response
Ensure that the essay directly answers the question by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of having a dress code at the workplace.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion sections are well-presented. However, work on linking ideas and arguments within paragraphs to improve overall coherence.
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