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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in locals newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter Explain what you are currently sowing Describe your suitability for this area of work Say when you can attend an interview

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Gurleen and I live across
the
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brentwood
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Brentwood
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 street
of
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from
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 your
restaurant
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. I am writing
this
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 letter to apply for
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the waiteress
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waiteress
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waitress
 job
that is
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 advertised for your
restaurant
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 in
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 because
this
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restaurant
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 is close to my house . Currently , I am working in
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a korean
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korean
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Korean
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restaurant
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 which is located in another city and
i
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I
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 always travel 1 hour 30 minutes for my job . When
i
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 read your job advertisement that you are looking for
waitress
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the waitress
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 who can
do
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multitask and well communicate with customers .Well,
i
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 have five years of professional experience which would be beneficial for your new
restaurant
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 and
i
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I
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 am
availaible
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available
 anytime because
i
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 live close to your
restaurant
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 which means 5
minutes
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 walk. I hope that
i
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 will get
call
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a call
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 for
interview
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an interview
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 as soon as possible . As far , I
beleive
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believe
i
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I
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 am the best candidate for your vacant position and
definately
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definitely
 satisfy the business
as well as
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 customer needs . I am
availaible
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available
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interview
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an interview
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 from 6 am to 10 pm . Please feel free to call
on
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apply
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604-778-9569 or email at [email protected]. I
attache
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 my resume with
this
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 letter and apply online as well. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Gurleen

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph discusses a single idea clearly. For example, separate your current job situation and reasons for applying into distinct paragraphs to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use more sophisticated linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your text. Common examples include 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' and 'Consequently.' This will aid in the logical progression of your ideas.
task achievement
Make sure to fully address all the points in the prompt. While you have mentioned your current job and suitability, expanding on your skills and experiences with specific examples will strengthen your response.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout your letter. Avoid casual expressions and ensure proper use of capitalization and punctuation. Professionalism in writing will demonstrate your suitability for the job.
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