Many people think that successful people’s accomplishments depend on the regions they come from, while other people think that it doesn’t matter where a person comes from, if that person has the will to succeed, he/she will triumph. What do you think?.

Many people argue that
region
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the region
plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
behind the
success
of a
person
while other people think that if a
person
has determination
then
he can get
success
irespective
in spite of everything; without regard to drawbacks
irrespective
of regional
background
. As per my opinion, I think that if the
person
has
will
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the will
and dedication
then
person
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the person
do not require
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does not require
support of regional
background
for the
success
.
Firstly
, people who come from
sophesticated
having or appealing to those having worldly knowledge and refinement and savoir-faire
sophisticated
background
can
also
fail to get
success
because there are many factors which play
vital role
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a vital role
to achieve our goal. If we do not have will, determination
and courage
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and courage, then
then
we
can not
can not
cannot
do anything even if we have
strong regional backgroud
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a strong regional background
strong regional background
or support.
For instance
, even though some communities in
Hariyana
a state in northern India
Haryana
state are popular in sports because of their region, out of them only quite a few people achieved
success
at international level.
Secondly
, sometimes regional
background
puts indirect pressure on us to perform well to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
our goals as we are being compared with other successful people having the same regional
background
.
Hence
,
instead
of
insperation
arousal of the mind to special unusual activity or creativity
inspiration
, many times we feel
depression
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depressed
and can not work freely towards our milestones.
For instance
, State of Maharastra has produced many well known international cricketers and now if any new cricketer starts his career, people compare him with other successful state crickets. In conclusion, even though region teaches many skills to individual,
person
can achieve these skills using strong will, determination and
hardwork
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hard work
.
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