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Evaluate the usefulness of Bigelow and La Gaipa’s work for understanding children’s friendship

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In the 70s, relationship
research
 in the field of psychology focused mainly on the study of emotional bonds between people.
Researchers
 reduced the role of
children
's
friendship
 to the question of what makes them feel attracted to each other
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 Understanding the phenomenon of
friendship
 in the context of psychology was very limited. In 1975, Brian
Bigelow
 and John La
Gaipa
 researched changes in the way
children
 perceive and define
friendship
 depending on their age and stage of development.
This
essay
 will evaluate the usefulness of their findings and
its
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further
 influence on the process of shaping the understanding of
children
's friendships.
Initially
 ,
Bigelow
 and La
Gaipa
 's intention was to explore the differences in
children
's expectations towards their best friends at different stages of development.
Researchers
 were particularly interested in exploring changes in the perception of friendships that occur as
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children
 grow up. Equally, their innovative
research
 has opened a new chapter in understanding child
friendship
 - an issue that has been completely unnoticed by psychology up to
this
 point. To explore how
children
 understand
friendship
 ,
Bigelow
 and La
Gaipa
 asked them to write an
essay
 , describing the relationship with the
same sex
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 best friend. Their task was to indicate the differences between expectations towards best
friend
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friends
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 and other colleagues.
However
 ,
researchers
 did not consider
friendship
 between
children
 of different sexes, which could have an impact on the results of their
research
 . To conduct
research
 ,
Bigelow
 and La
Gaipa
 collected 480 essays written by
children
 of different sexes at the age between 6 to 14 years. They came from lower-middle-class and upper-working-class families. Eight different schools based in Windsor, Ontario, Canada joined the study. 30 boys and 30 girls were appointed from each of them to take part. A large sample group was undoubtedly an asset.
However
 , the method of selecting participants for the studies could result in a sampling error. The
research
 has
also
 devalued the influence of culture in understanding
children
's
friendship
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. Before
Bigelow
 and La
Gaipa
 began the studies, they created a list of different characteristics that
children
 could want to include when describing their best friend.
Researchers
 divided the list into 21 categories and
then
 used content analysis in each
essay
 .
Furthermore
 , they were able to quickly analyse samples of 480 essays by subordinating characteristics to already defined categories and applying frequency count. An additional advantage of the method used was the possibility of comparing differences in understanding friendships between
children
 of different ages or opposite sex. The applied generalization significantly contributed to the development of understanding of
friendship
 between
children
.
However
 , its limitation was strictly subordinating the characteristics of
friendship
 to predetermined coding.
Such
 a solution excluded the inclusion of
friendship
 traits indicated by the
children
 in the
essay
 if their reasoning did not fit into categories created by the
researchers
. In view of the above, I suspect that the method could have contributed to affecting
research
 findings by confirmatory bias.
Furthermore
 , the transformation of qualitative into quantitative data likely caused the loss in the understanding of
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 and personal dimensions
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 the studied
children
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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