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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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It has been argued that the professional aspect of
life
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 has been modified. Some people believe that single career old school has been shifted to a wide range of possibilities, and
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,
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are
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 having to be in continue acquisition of knowledge. Personally, I completely agree with
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 statement because lifestyle has changed and new
careers
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 are appearing. The main reason why I believe that
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 are seeking to have multiple
careers
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 or paths to acquire
money
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 is due to the change in the way we live now compared to the past. nation want to have more in
life
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 than just work, and for
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money
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 is necessary, so they are looking for other ways to have it. To illustrate, many economists have Youtube channels to teach people how to invest their
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,
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 as stock markets.
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, many are educating themselves in order to pursue more
money
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. Another reason behind
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 new tendency of multi-career
life
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 is because new
careers
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 are being created every day. Considering the appearance of new technologies and apps, society
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 seeing themselves in the position of being their own bosses and even getting more
money
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, so they are changing professions. A good example is many famous TikTokers that have spoken about their previous
careers
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 and the fact that they were not happy compared to what they have known.
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, the new
careers
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 have helped them to feel better. In conclusion, even though some may argue that having another career in
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 might be a risk, I would like to reiterate my strong view that I totally support having several
careers
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 in
life
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 as
life
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 is in constant variation and new technological advancements are helping us to acquire more
money
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 and knowledge to pursue our dreams.
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