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The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
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The given diagram illustrates the number of
vehicles
 per
thousand
of
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Chinese
nationals
 in the given period of 1987 and 1999.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the amount of
the
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vehicles
 increased over the given period of time and by 1999 it was recorded approximately over 4000
vehicles
 per
thousand
of
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nationals
.
In
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 the beginning from 1987 to
1991
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,1991
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 there was a significant increase
of
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the
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vehicle ownership. It
was
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started below 500
vehicles
 in 1987 and by 1991 it almost reached nearly 1000
vehicles
. 1991 to
approximately
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 year 1994 the number of
vehicles
 remained the same. From 1995 there was a rapid increase
of
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the
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vehicle ownership in China. In 1995 it almost reached 2000
vehicles
 per
thousand
Chinese
nationals
.
Additionally
 between 1995 and 1999 in
three year
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 time
duration
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 the data claims that
number
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a number
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 of
vehicles
were
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 approximately
up to
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3000 per
thousand
Chinese
nationals
.
Finally
,
at the end
 of the given period which is
1999
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 the diagram indicates approximately
above
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4000
vehicles
 owned per
thousand
of
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Chinese
 people.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, thousand, chinese, nationals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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