The graph shows the spending three kinds of spreads in us from 1981 and 2007.

The graph shows the spending three kinds of spreads in us from 1981 and 2007.
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is important in our
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, but sometimes
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caused a bad or a good impact
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. All countries in the world try to depend on automation because it decreases
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cutting-edge machinery like the 3D printer, if we need to compare the advantage and
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, we couldn’t get any negative
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, the old industry, especially traditional don’t have any position in new life because these jobs rarely using in these days, but the craftsmen try to keep their effort and don’t care
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new automation or thought to convert to new machinery, particularly when these works depend on their hands
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as tailor, taxi drivers and Blacksmiths, all these conventional trials can be replaced by new automation depend on machines or robots.
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the men try to get money
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one of the reasons don’t think to leave their production.

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