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People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to over come it?

#people #aim #balance #work #lives
It is claimed that keeping
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work-life harmony for most people nowadays is just out of the question.
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them. With the intensity of
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 explosion and the incessant rise of the market economy, most people seem to
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with
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 the race to meet the social norm.
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of possessing
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 certain valued properties
such
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, an individual has to work harder for financial gains.
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those who after years of making
great
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 effort,
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finally
 climb the ladder of success in their career,
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are more likely to be attracted by the glory of
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 achievements and yearn for
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higher
self actualization
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. To
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such
need
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, they inevitably become more reachable
as a result
 of work extension and the increase in the number of related personnel, which leads to a
further
 sacrifice of their personal life
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exchange
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 their desirable social recognition. In order to overcome
this
 issue, there are no other ways, but one’s will to set up a more reasonable timetable and schedule for their daily tasks.
For example
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instead
 of spending most of his or her being in the office, one can register
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fitness or meditation class after work to boost their
inner-self
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.
Besides
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also
 maintain some of their hobbies by sharing these with friends and family, especially
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 the weekends when most companies are off and undone tasks can be put aside until next Monday. In case, some people may still blame workloads as the culprit for their time loss, it is vital that they consult an expert
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 time management so that they
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 acknowledge what to prioritize in their agenda. In conclusion, a compromise between material and spiritual life seems to be very challenging to accomplish
due to
 several reasons belonging to modernization.
However
 , time arrangement should be the key to any problems related to our social life.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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