The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The chart illustrates electricity
consumption
and
production
in the top ten highest
countries
in 2014. It is clear from the chart that all
countries
, with the exception of Germany, produce marginally more than they consume. The two top
countries
, the United States and particularly China, were strong outliers
while
the remaining
countries
had similar numbers and lagged far behind in both
production
and
consumption
. China produced and consumed the most, at 5,398 billion and 5,322
kWh
, respectively. The
next
nearest country in terms of both statistics was the US, where residents consumed 3,866 kilowatts an hour and produced slightly more at 4,099. Russian lead the rest of the nations with 1,057 (in
production
) and 1,038
kWh
(expenditure) followed by Japan (936.2 for
production
and 856.7
kWh
for
consumption
). India and Canada ranked 5th and 6th with India producing 871
kWh
and consuming 698.8
while
Canada was slightly lower in both (618.9 and 499.9
kWh
). In the 7th and 8th spots were France (producing 561.2
kWh
and consuming 462.9) and Brazil, which recorded numbers
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530.7 and 455.8 for
production
and
consumption
, respectively. In the final two positions were Germany and the Republic of Korea with Germany having higher
production
that
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Korea (526.6 to 485.1
kWh
)
as well as
consumption
(582.5
kWh
compared with 449.5).
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