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You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music.your neighbour. write a letter of appology explaining the ocasion and it wont happen again

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I am writing
this
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 letter as
apology
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an apology
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 related to the loud music.Which was played by us.Because
last
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 week,I organised a birthday party.That's why
this
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 happened.
To begin
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 with,I celebrated the birthday of my son and I held the party at home.After that,I invited my all friends and relatives on that occasion.All of them were enjoying and nobody noticed the volume of the music.Because people were
enjoying
Correct pronoun usage
enjoying it
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 ,I felt
my-self
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myself
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 on cloud nine.I got a chance to meet my aunty after 5 years.
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,she is living in Canada.But, we have a good bond between us.
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,I decorated my house with beautiful lights and we cut the cake.After them, all came onto the dance floor and started dancing.I can not forget
this
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 function in my life.
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,I am promising with you.
This
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 would not happen again in the upcoming years.Because we have discussed that we will book the restaurant for these types festivals.I am really sorry for
inconvenience
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the inconvenience
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 on that day. I am looking forward to your response. Thank you Yours Sincerely, Gagandeep Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction that explicitly mentions the purpose of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Avoid unrelated personal details that do not contribute to the main apology.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to make the letter more interesting and engaging.
grammatical range
Proofread the letter to eliminate grammatical errors.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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