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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to
work
 for a company or organization. Why might
this
 be the case. What could be the disadvantages of being
self-employed
Suggestion
self-employed?
 These days, an overwhelming majority of people choose to run their own business rather than being employed by other people. I am of the opinion that strong desire to have flexibility in job encourages a large number of people to start their own business.
However
, they may face some difficulties in the future. Being self-employed gives individuals the privilege of choosing their own schedule and workplace.
For example
, self-employers have the chance to perform
work
 from home.
This
 means that they will not have to be worried about being late for
work
 or get stuck in a traffic jam to commute job every day.
Moreover
, they have full control over their own schedule,
therefore
 they decide when and how much they
work
,
in contrast
 to working for someone else or
company
Suggestion
a company
 which usually requires set hours
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks associated with self-employment. The main issue is that self-employed persons may have to be an accountant, human resource manager and so forth at the same time. It is mainly because they do not have enough money to hire other people to do these tasks, particularly at the start of business which they are on a tight budget and many of them are not even able to pay their own bills and debt.
Consequently
, they have to bear mounting pressure. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that being your own master has many upsides and
that is
 why many people decide to be a self-employed,
although
this
 trend has some drawbacks as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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