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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can is better for their overall skills development and creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree?

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Children
 are the future of the country so nowadays we always focus on development and pay attention to everything
children
 do. Some people believe that doing an ẹnoyable
activity
 with a child can
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 better for their
overall
skills
 development and creativity than reading.
One
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 the one hand the
activity
 is better,
one
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 the other hand is reading better. In my view, I partly agree with
this
 opinion,
Firstly
,
children
 often prefer playing and doing activities
than
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 reading books, so that can help them develop more
skills
, healthy
instead
 of just sitting and reading.
Secondly
, they can have more friends, and better communicate if they have more
activity
 because they can have more opportunities to meet people so they can
overall
 their
skills
. The most familiar example of
this
 is education emphasizes practice rather than learning knowledge from textbooks.
However
,
to
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 much
activity
 can cause accidents and they can learn bad
skills
 from outside like smoking,
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Although
 I partly agree with that view, I still believe that reading can help the child better for their
overall
skills
 development. Because books can teach
children
skills
 that cannot be taught outside, they can only learn from a book, so the child needs to read to know that knowledge. Not only that, reading books can help
children
 relax their minds and have a rich imagination, from that they can be more creative in study and teamwork. To illustrate
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