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Band 7.5

You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. You do NOT need to write any addresses. You should write at least 150 words. In your letter introduce yourself describe your plans for the party invite your neighbour to come

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Dear Abc Hope you and your family are doing splendidly. Well, I am Nav from 1002, your new neighbour. I have recently moved from Scarborough to Collingwood. It was quite astonishing that the area is really peaceful
as well as
 gorgeous. I am extremely worried about the noise problem you might face on the party day.
Hence
, I really apologise for that in advance. Actually, It has been a long time since I have caught up with all my friends.
Therefore
, I was thinking of throwing a party for all my near and dear ones, on the purchase of
this
 contemporary villa.
Although
,
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 everyone has a hectic schedule nowadays so, the party is going to be held on
this
 Saturday evening with the hope that everyone will be able to come and join.
Moreover
, I am thinking of arranging Chinese and Korean food with a few branded bears. I would like to invite you and your family to
this
 celebration. I hope you all join us as I will be eagerly waiting to meet and know my new neighbours. Yours faithfully Rav
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Coherence and Cohesion
While your letter includes a logical structure and appropriate greeting and closing, ensure each paragraph is confined to a single idea for clarity. Introductions, body paragraphs, and conclusions should be distinct.
Task Achievement
Your response fulfills the task, introducing yourself, describing the party, and inviting the neighbour. However, you could enhance the letter by adding more detail about what the neighbour can expect, showing sensitivity to their potential concerns about noise.
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