he charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts given, provide information about both the number of people who attended entertainment venues and the entrance fee of those,
the
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year 2009. From a first look, it seems that the higher the admission ticket was the less audience attended the event.
For instance
, less than 200 thousand individuals watched sports live,
whereas
more than five times up preferred to go to the cinema.
Accordingly
, the tickets from the latter
costed
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15 dollars per person,
while
the former’s ones were five times more expensive, counted
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75 dollars excluding the basketball games, where tickets were priced
34
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dollars. Theme parks,
although
they did not have much difference in
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fee
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,
comparing
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with sports, they had nearly
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triple attendance than them.
Nevertheless
, cinemas remained the most preferable entertainment activity.
To sum up
, people opted for going to the cinema the most as they probably could not deny the fact that it was the cheapest venue, they could entertain themselves and their families as it had
also
the best discounts.
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