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Parents are the best teachers Do you agree or disagree ?

#parents #teachers
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The quality of education is very important in our lives.
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 many people argue that
parents
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 teach their
children
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 better than teachers, others think that professional teachers are more qualified. I completely agree that
parents
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 are the best mentors in the world.
Firstly
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,
children
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 in their life start learning from their
parents
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 how to communicate with others. The habits and behaviours of the child depend on the environment of the family in which they are living. School start at 6 years old, at
this
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 age,
children
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 have already essential knowledge about society.
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, with the birth of a child,
parents
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 teach their babies how to speak, how to walk, and how to eat. A baby's
first
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 word tends to be formulated to address their mother and father to get their attention.
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 learning one's
first
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 words is a great achievement and it's all thanks to
parents
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.
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, there are some values that educators can not teach to
children
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.
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, with academic programmes we can learn math, physics, geography or science but professional professors can not teach us how to make a happy living.
It is clear that
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 when we face some trouble or have to cope with pressure,
parents
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 are the
first
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 people that we find and share with. Mom and Dad always give us useful advice and are willing to help us. Plus,
parents
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also
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 have more time, especially mothers who would not be tired of repeating one thing over and over for their infant. In conclusion, I absolutely agree that
parents
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 are the
first
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 and the best teachers as they give us the lesson that we can not find in books and they are the ones who give everything for us to become a better person.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion are more explicit and reflect the overall content of the essay. Develop a clearer line of argument, with more specific supporting examples.
task achievement
Provide a more balanced discussion of both sides of the argument. Include specific examples of the teacher's role in a child's development to provide a comprehensive analysis.
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