The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The illustration below provides information on two possible locations
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a new
supermarket
that is
planned for the
town
of Garlsdon.
Overall
, it seems that the chosen locations are far from each other and located in different parts of the
town
. So neither of
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is appropriate for all the towns. To start with, the first location for the
supermarket
is in the countryside. It is 12 I’m close to Hindol
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population is only 10,000 people,
however
,
it
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supermarket
number one is quite far from housing and the
town
Center. Compared to store number one,
supermarket
number two is situated in the
Town
Center
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has no traffic zone, so that would make
this
location more convenient for residents.
This
market is closer to
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area and other local towns,
such
as Brandson and Cransdon. The main road to Brandso is 16 km and the road
of
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Cransdon is 9 km more.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket, town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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