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The bar shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people visiting cinemas on seven different days in a week in one European country.
Overall
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 Saturday has the highest proportion,
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 other categories. It is
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 notable that except
Friday
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 erratic values over three different years. As can be seen from the chart, Saturday was the main choice among 7 days, with two-fifths in 2003, compared to a modest 30%
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 Friday and Sunday. In comparison with weekdays, Tuesday accounted for one-fifth, slightly decreased in the next two days. At the same time, Monday made up a minority, only 10%. With respect to remaining categories, Saturday witnessed a jump in 2005, with 25% and
then
 reduced to 43% in 2007. The same trend applied to Sunday and Monday
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 at 33% and 13% respectively.
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, Friday remained unchanged at 30% in three years, compared with the fluctuations in Tuesday and Thursday figures. As regards Wednesday, it saw a
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 decrease, from a small minority in 2003 to just under 10% in 2007 over a period of 4 years.
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